What is good writing?

2.6.3 Re-working Hansa's essay

Now we have looked at Philip's and Hansa's essays in such detail, what have we learned? Perhaps the best way to answer that is to write another version of the essay, building on all the things we have discussed. In fact, I have taken the basic content of Hansa's essay, tidied it up and shuffled it about a little to bring out her argument more strongly. (However this is not the only possible way of structuring an argument in answer to this question.) I have also woven in some of Ellis's terms, and more reference to her article, to show what is meant by ‘referring to your source material’.

Activity 4

Read the version below and compare it with Hansa's. Then look quickly back through all the Key Points boxes in this course to see whether what we said should be done is achieved here.

Click here to open the revised essay (PDF, 0.1MB).